I loved the writing and the music! I agree with Marisa on the paragraph separating, but other than that it was really immersive and fun to play! The images were also a very nice touch and I loved the fact that you guys went with the Queen Mary ship, it made the gameplay feel real. Great job!
This is a really great game featuring story-heavy elements. I would suggest, though, separating the large paragraphs of text. These elements are very straining for some players and it sometimes was hard to keep up with what was going on, and keeping some of the characters straight. Even just taking the text that you already have and breaking them up into different sections would help. I would also suggest adding more visual elements to help engage the player into the story, even more, which would be very helpful! Otherwise, it's a fun experience and I had a good time playing through it! Good job!
This was an interesting story! I would honestly like to play it again and again to see if there's anything I missed. The color palette and dramatic music really emphasize the dark tone of the events depicted. Overall, the story was easy to follow and held my attention. My only suggestions would be to split up some of the longer passages and to double check spelling!
The story is very compelling and the art scattered throughout definitely adds to each of the scenes! I am definitely interested in finding out who the killer is and figuring out the mystery. Also, I love all of your music choices. They really enhance the time period and mood of your game's scenes. The couple critiques I have are that there are some spelling errors throughout (in some cases the words are spelled right but aren't the right word if that makes sense like a word that sounds like the intended word will be there instead) but that can be fixed with a simple once over. In addition, the red text is a little hard to see but I think all you would need to do to fix that is make it the same boldness as the text that surrounds it. I'd also agree with the comment that mentioned breaking up some of the passages so that they're easier to read. Overall great work!
I love this! The wording, imagery, and music work really well together and fit with the theme. These elements create a sense of immersion and suspense that help hold my interest. My only critique is that some passages are a little long which can make them seem like more work to read. If you split them up a little, it would feel like less reading and give people a break in between. I would love to see the rest if you end up continuing it!
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I loved the writing and the music! I agree with Marisa on the paragraph separating, but other than that it was really immersive and fun to play! The images were also a very nice touch and I loved the fact that you guys went with the Queen Mary ship, it made the gameplay feel real. Great job!
This is a really great game featuring story-heavy elements. I would suggest, though, separating the large paragraphs of text. These elements are very straining for some players and it sometimes was hard to keep up with what was going on, and keeping some of the characters straight. Even just taking the text that you already have and breaking them up into different sections would help. I would also suggest adding more visual elements to help engage the player into the story, even more, which would be very helpful! Otherwise, it's a fun experience and I had a good time playing through it! Good job!
This was an interesting story! I would honestly like to play it again and again to see if there's anything I missed. The color palette and dramatic music really emphasize the dark tone of the events depicted. Overall, the story was easy to follow and held my attention. My only suggestions would be to split up some of the longer passages and to double check spelling!
The story is very compelling and the art scattered throughout definitely adds to each of the scenes! I am definitely interested in finding out who the killer is and figuring out the mystery. Also, I love all of your music choices. They really enhance the time period and mood of your game's scenes. The couple critiques I have are that there are some spelling errors throughout (in some cases the words are spelled right but aren't the right word if that makes sense like a word that sounds like the intended word will be there instead) but that can be fixed with a simple once over. In addition, the red text is a little hard to see but I think all you would need to do to fix that is make it the same boldness as the text that surrounds it. I'd also agree with the comment that mentioned breaking up some of the passages so that they're easier to read. Overall great work!
this was so exciting and well-written, i definitely felt the suspense and i'm hella invested now
I love this! The wording, imagery, and music work really well together and fit with the theme. These elements create a sense of immersion and suspense that help hold my interest. My only critique is that some passages are a little long which can make them seem like more work to read. If you split them up a little, it would feel like less reading and give people a break in between. I would love to see the rest if you end up continuing it!